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Hey haha i used a lj cut this time!! um.. please dont make stupid comments on my grammer or spelling.. im a horrid speller.. but thats not the point of me posting. I dont post to know that i wrote the wrong kind of there. I post because i want opinions on how i write, or my stories.. or how i could do better. Thanks.

 

(some of my writing is sort of graphic.. this one isnt that bad.. but i just dont want to offend anyone at any moment.) this is a small segment of my short story. enjoy!!!

 

“Hey Shannon... are you comin?” Sarah giggles as she runs through the grassy field “grab your stuff… come on… it’s almost sunrise, we best be going if you we want to make the train!”
 
“…Sarah… I’m scared, what if he finds me?” Shannon says nervously
 
“Don’t worry about that, ill be here, and if he comes after you… um… ILL KICK HIS ASS!” Sarah says with a daring grin
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Sarah grabs Shannon’s hand and they ran through the piercing darkness. They giggles as they felt the feathery tall grass tickly their feet. They knew the area so well, they didn’t have to worry one bit about the darkness. They jumped the fallen logs, and they crawled under the low tree branches. They ran so fast, as if they were nearly flying. They felt so strong, they felt as if they invincible, always had Shannon dreamt of leaving that sullied shack, she once called home. She wanted to leave her family, her 2 Pedi file brothers and her drunken father.

 


“Hey Shannon... are you comin?” Sarah giggles as she runs through the grassy field “grab your stuff… come on… it’s almost sunrise, we best be going if you we want to make the train!”
 
“…Sarah… I’m scared, what if he finds me?” Shannon says nervously
 
“Don’t worry about that, ill be here, and if he comes after you… um… ILL KICK HIS ASS!” Sarah says with a daring grin.
 
Sarah grabs Shannon’s hand and they ran through the piercing darkness. They giggles as they felt the feathery tall grass tickly their feet. They knew the area so well, they didn’t have to worry one bit about the darkness. They jumped the fallen logs, and they crawled under the low tree branches. They ran so fast, as if they were nearly flying. They felt so strong, they felt as if they invincible, always had Shannon dreamt of leaving that sullied shack, she once called home. She wanted to leave her family, her 2 Pedi file brothers and her drunken father.
 
Since her mom left 7 years ago, Shannon new one way of life, and that was being touched and abused, and she thought it was because she didn’t work hard enough, or long enough to satisfy her family. Ever since her skanky mom left her father when Shannon was only 8, her father started to drink heavily. It first started out just a bear after work every once in awhile, to ease the tears. Then it began to happen every night, and then every morning, and then he would start waking up Shannon when he came home from the bar at 3 in the morning. She only new one thing and that was to take care of her family and her “unfortunate” older brothers Sam and Nick. Who were 6 years older than her. Shannon always felt that since she didn’t know her mother as well as Sam and nick, she needed to try and ease their pain... so she started to do what they asked. Until one day Nick asked her to show him what girls had and guys didn’t, when she was only 10 and they were 16. It only got worse from there. Shannon never met girls, she had a lot of boyfriends, but they’d only last until the first lay, and then they would get bored.
 
Until Shannon met Sarah, Sarah grew up on her own. Her mom and dad were junkies, and the only thing they provided her was with a roof over her head. She grew up with her older brother matt who was 10 years older than her, so he left her as soon as he could get on his feel alone. Now matt was a good guy, he’d send her money to eat and would keep as close of contact as he could with her, until he new that she could survive on her own. Sarah was a tough girl. She handled her own, she new what she wanted to do, and she did everything she could to complete her journey in life, and that was surviving another night. She met Shannon one day at school in the 7th grade. Shannon looked alone and Sarah had just moved to Stillwater. They talked briefly, but nothing serious came out of the friendship until about 9th grade. That’s when they were inseparable.
 
Shannon would always bring Sarah to her house while her dad was out at the bar, and Sarah would flirt with Sam and nick, one day Sarah offered to do them, but Shannon got so disgusted she kicked Sarah out for the night. Sarah soon got to know the Kingsley family and understood why Shannon hated her dad and brothers so much. Sarah sympathized so much for Shannon, because she felt Shannon didn’t know how to protect herself as well as Sarah had.
 
They grew so close that they new everything about each other. They experimented sexually together, they experimented drugs together, but they both were pretty morally opposed to drugs, seeing as how fucked up their families were. Their lives were hell until one night they got fed up.
 
This one evening Shannon’s brothers were out at a party and it was just her in her room  and her dad had gone to the bar. Shannon was doing her homework when her dad barged into her room and started to unbuckle his pants. He told Shannon he had a ruff day and that he needed to relax, and Shannon “if she was a good daughter” new how to do that for him. He was so drunk that his words were slurring and Shannon got scared. She told him no, and he flipped out. Things got ruff that night, and Shannon new her brothers wouldn’t help her so she had to leave all on her own.
Later that night she called Sarah up crying, explaining the entire event and told her she wanted to leave. Sarah jumped at the opportunity of an adventure and told her exactly what to do.


“Get a small bag packed, find your dads wallet and take as much money as possible and ill be waiting near the tree down your lot.” Sarah said quickly hanging up the phone as soon as she said “I love you.”
 
Shannon wiped her tears and prepared for her big leave. She took $300 from her dad’s wallet and ran out the door. All she said before she left the door was a silent “fuck you.”
 
“Sarah, maybe I’m supposed to take care of my family, you know… maybe they need me. Am I just running away from my problem?” Shannon hesitated.
 
“Oh shut up, and you are not running away from anything, we BOTH are flying out of here… together. You deserve more than the world could give you, you are an amazing person Shannon, just believe me. We will go off to California and we will live a fantasy life, Trust me!” Sarah assured her
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They ran a mile until they hit the train tracks; they waited for about an hour and Sarah heard the freight train coming.
 
“You remember what to do… right?” Sarah asked for assurance
 
“….uhuh….” Nervously Shannon replied
 
“Just don’t give up, if you miss it... run again… now this is it… I love you.” Sarah said screaming.

 
As they both made that freight train, they both said a good “FUCK YOU.” and then they sat in the lonely cart with a barrel of hay... and they hugged each other. Not for support, just for the simple pleasure of knowing they had each other.
Shannon rested her head on Sarah’s shoulder and Sarah sat there cradling her, and whispered:
 
“Shannon, I want you to know that I love you, you are the only thing that I live for, without you, there was no one else, we will fly away together, forever.”
 
Sarah repeated “we will fly away together, forever.” Until her eyes fluttered away into a dream sate.


 

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